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crossdressing play

>she give him fresh panties
>not the one she currently wear

why I feel disappointed ?

sequel(RAW):/g/1019282/1abd72db05/

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The grammar. It hurts.

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Cute wincest story, but wanted more action while crossdressing...

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w e e n i e

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@gravytub:
Does it really hurt that much? If you could pick out one or two of them, it would be great! I'll be able to do it better next-time.

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Unbelievably shitty translation.

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The grammar is quite bad but it is still readable for me. I suggest getting an editor or at least proofreader.

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w e e n i e.
I already got used from reading too much MTL. This much is fine probably

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@TurretOvaKil: I'm the editor as well. And I don't think there is a proofreader helping me. I'm not English native speaker, and also have no English friend. I really have to learn and improve by myself.
@PAnZuRiEL: No thing I can learn from this comment of yours.

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Poor grammar? Yeah, this one got more pervert-ed.

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page 2 you have not forgot our promise -> should be "you have not forgotten", -> also "you didnt forget" would also be suitable with a slight rearrange.
page 3 our indicates plural so you could argue that uniform needs the s for plural aswell but thats a minor misstake if any.
page 3 take of yours and lend rina them, reads very odd and is flawed context wise, a more demanding tone would fit better, ie "take of your clothes and give them to me!" unless its some character tick that she refers to herself in 3rd person you can remove about any instance of herself calling her name with a pro noun. ie I, me, my etc...
page 4 there is rina's smell on all them... I cant think about it. also very odd to read first part could be " there is rina's smell all over it" the second part is a hickup for me, why would he not be able to think about it when he is clearly thinking about it ? is he trying to express that he shouldnt think about it or is he trying to express that he cant think about anything else ?
page 4 wouldnt like to see rinas panties ? the sentence is missing a pronoun "wouldnt you like to see rinas panties ?"
page 4 I did wear thing down there you know. Its probably the male trying to express that rina isnt wearing his uniform completely and refers to the missing pants. In that case it should be " I did wear something down there too, you know ?"
page 5 lets go out while you are dressing like this. minor flaw more common would be the use of dressed instead of dressing but this will fly too
page 5 next time you have to go out with me dressing like these -> should be " next time you have to go out with me dressed like this"
page 6 Hey this doesnt like a girl... whole bubble is flawed should be " hey this doesnt look like a girl at all. What would we do if you got revealed ?" still not perfectly round but you get the gist.
page 6 it has flew out panties now. i cant even just try "it grew out of the panties"
page 6 to help you tie a ribbon. context wise a nightmare, might be very close to the original but regarding the previous translation would make more sense as "I tied you a ribbon"
page 6 doesnt this like... such a pervert... "this looks super perverted... " if the like is referring to the male expressing his dislike "I dont like it... looks super perverted..."

I dont know if there is a character limit for comments, the rest of it is just as loaded with misstakes, hope it helps you improve.

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@Phosphorcracker: Thank you so much! They have got fixed. But I kept Rina since she refers to herself in 3rd person.

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pg 9 well done instead of well dont？

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@guodonggu: Thanks! This is my typo.

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Ah, there are so few doujins about crossdressing males x females

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