The original magazine on which this chapter is featured on can be found here:
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Hi, guys. Noob Translation here. Just a random guy, studying Japanese, translating manga for practice.

I hope you don't mind me posting my translation here. As my name suggests, my Japanese is still weak and I'm still new to translating manga, but since it seems like there's no English translation for this series yet, I might as well just upload mine.

That being said, if I translated some words wrong (I wasn't sure about a few words) or made some horrible formatting mistakes, please let me know.

I'm really sorry for not translating those text that are written directly on the background, on page 1 and 2. I don't know how to translate them without ruining the image. Should I just add some white space at the bottom?

I will continue translating the rest of the series. There's four chapters out right now. I hope you find this decent enough to enjoy.

I think you did a pretty good job overall. The only thing that felt iffy to me is "If I rose my voice..." I feel like it should be raise, not rose, but that's just me.

I hope you translate the other Shine Mirage entries, it seems pretty good so far.

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Thank you. Oh yeah you're right. My bad. It should be "raised" in that case. Gonna be more careful next time.

Yes, I've begun translating the second chapter. I do plan to translate all four.

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I think the TL job is pretty good, I think.

Careful on producing stilted English, though. Like on page 12:

"Komusume no kuse ni shiri ha rippa jya nee ka" --> "You're just a little girl, but isn't your butt pretty great?" sounds a bit awkward. His Japanese is rough and pretty casual, so I think something like, "For a little girl, you have a fine ass" or something might be better.

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Yeah, that's one of my biggest problems so far. Converting the speech pattern. I actually had a 50/50 struggle with that, "For a little girl, you have a fine ass," line but I wanted to preserve the insulting nature of the sentence. My approach when translating this chapter was to stay as close as possible to the original, but it seemed like it made the translation stiff and unnatural instead. I will try to be more relaxed and casual on the next chapter's translation.

Also, I think I will just leave the "Hengen Souki" part as it is on the next chapter. I wrecked my brain trying to translate that name.

Thank you very much for the input! :D

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Nice! Thanks for the translation! You did a great job in translating this.

Translating the way of talking to English is pretty hard since Japan has many form of talking that is unique but usually lost in translation because of no way to translate it to English. People who don't know runes and read this probably won't realize that Shine Mirage talks using the "ojou-sama" speech (using desuwa, desuno, etc in her speech pattern).

Also, if you want to practice translating, why don't you practice by translating Shine Mirage's web novel? P...please?

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Thank you! Yeah, that's what I like about her. The proud "ojou-sama" speech. It adds more to the lewdness.

Ah, I did find that web novel when I was looking for the release date for the next heroine magazine. It's 37 pages of full-text if I'm not mistaken? I think it will take me forever to translate that. That is, if I don't lose my mind along the way. Haha. Well, I will ask around if people are also interested in that. If they do, I might set it as a side-project. Every time I translate a manga I will do 2-3 pages of it I guess. I have never seen any translated web novel in this site, and I think translating more less-known-but-amazing manga like this one would be better for everyone. I hope you understand. I want to finish the entire Shine Mirage first before anything else, after all.

By the way, I will upload the next chapter tomorrow. Around 12 hours from now. I finally got the time to sit down and finish it. Life has been awfully busy these past weeks.

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