Um.... yeah... explanation of the storyline here because with the "Engrish" I cannot understand what the heck is going on here.
Edit: Agreed with Leader of Chaos... needs some grammar tweaking badly.

Last edited on 02 March 2017, 22:26.

Base +7, Ddddanm +6

Seems like a well formed story, but it was borderline unreadable with this grammar. It was also well drawn too.

Base +10, Ddddanm +6

The artist's primary language is Spanish, and he has help from someone else with translation. Unfortunately the translator isn't very good with grammar as you can see...

Base +6

Meh.

The translation is fine. Its just that the ending is just awful. Theres a deux ex machina, plot dump, random plot twist, unnecessarily verbose explanation by the author AND it retcons the story's prequel for no real reason.

Long story short: Pinkie has multiple personalities and goes torture-psycho when shes off her meds, which no one ever heard of until the last 5 pages.

Base +9, Ddddanm +6

Luna looses it and kills Pinkie and yet later Pinkie is back alive? Say what? Never mind the ending makes no blasted sense. I don't think this story lost something in translation but didn't make sense to begin with.

Base +9