Next chapter: soon™

RAW: /g/1046026/b579c55e08/

Ahh the venus flytrap.

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Whoa-oh here she comes, she's a maneeater.

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Page 18: All according to keikaku

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Next chapter and the two will discover that she is a succubus.

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*EvilSanta*

"Translator's Note: Keikaku Means Plan."

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It's regrettable, but I'm working on that poor grammar tag as we speak. Compared to other works that get this tag (including previous works by this translator), this one is fairly readable, but there's a lot of awkward phrasing in here, an overabundance of typos and a very noticeable omission of pronouns and prepositions in quite a few pieces of dialogue, particularly in the latter part of the work.

At first, I was just going to put the ten obligatory examples, but I decided to add explanations as well in case the translator is trying to improve his/her English. I may even list the isolated typos if the translator is interested:

pg. 4 "It because of you last night" Omission of verb. (It's, It is,)
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pg. 4 "Our parents passed away when I was a kid and then, my brother act as my parent" Incorrect usage of verb to act, not just in the conjugation of person (should be third which would have made it "acts" if not for the following), but in tense as well (should be past which would make it "acted")
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pg. 4 "If so, then I won't have to concern with you anymore" I had to think about whether this was just a nitpick. Technically, it's grammatically correct, but the nature of the sentence as a whole is reflexive, and so "concern myself with" is necessary rather than trivial.
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pg. 7 "Because of my brother, I have a mixed feelings about this..." The article "a" has no place in this sentence.
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pg. 9 "I thought, you're always on good term with my brother" While "I thought that" is a nitpick, there are two other issues in this sentence, one involving verb conjugation (should be "you were" instead of you are/you're) and the other involving number (should be "on good terms").
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pg. 13 "Forcefully shoved my cock into your mouth get you this wet" Two incorrect verb conjugations (first should be shoving, second should be got)
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pg. 13 "To let other man cum in here..." Awkward phrasing (either "another man" or "other men" would make this read so much better)
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pg. 14 "You've accepted other man already" Same as the previous example.
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pg. 17 "If you're keep tightening" Inconsistent subject-verb agreement (should be "If you keep tightening")
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pg. 19 "I matched my timing with your shift, and then made you saw me with another man" Should be "made you see me" ("To make" is the main verb, and so the conjugations are only applied to it. "To see" is only acting as an infinitive here in relation to "to make")

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Page 10: GOTCHA' NOW BITCH

Page 18: AW SHIT I FUCKED UP

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Pg5, bottom left panel.

Didn't even try to hide it...

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please tell me you're gonna translate the whole book...

thx for this awesome work...

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just when it was getting good and she gives him the death grip it end.... C'MON!!!!

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dumplings tastes more delicious

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Guy thought he was the protagonist of a NTR Manga. Turned out, he had the genre wrong.

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page 18: GOTCHYA BITCH!

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when the next chapter gonna be translate?

3 years and no progress WTF

Last edited on 17 October 2020, 09:45.

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