This is ambitious, I'll say that much but personally not my style.

Base +7, jfragrettel +8

Honestly? I don't really know what to say. From an amateur author to another, the reason for Time Traveling could've been done better. Sure, it was powerful enough to draw some emotions from me however they weren't a lot. The magic is there (no pun intended) but the plot doesn't exactly 'deep down' to 'bring it out' completely but good work though. I'm sure in time, you'll get better with this.

Last edited on 04 July 2017, 21:02.

Base +3, nad +6, mjaking +6, AluminatoR +7, jfragrettel +8

I think Asura hit the nail on the head for a lot of good fanfics.

The talent is growing, but the experience isn't where it needs to be just yet.

Base +7, nad +6, jfragrettel +8, FuckGoogle +4

I agree. It is a decent little read but nothing like Between Friends or even Shipping War AU levels of engaging.

It is nice on a casual level. I happened upon this on /co/ myself and decided to share.

Also,just so you guys know,there is a Part II of this story.
Let me know if you want me to upload it.

Last edited on 06 July 2017, 16:24.

Base +8, nad +6, UAkumaV +6, AluminatoR +7, jfragrettel +8, 小帕5412 +6

pta q sad :'v

Base +6, Lanerk -6, trapmint -6, BamBlackStar +4

esta interesante, aunq `podria mejorar un poco mas el motivo, pero tiene potencial, esta la esencia aun con el angst y todo, esta bueno, pero... It's complete?

Base +6, jfragrettel +8, Rirfen +6, 小帕5412 +6

Too sad :'v

Base +6, trapmint -6, BamBlackStar +4

For those who don't want to feel like getting punched in the gut,I warn you to refrain from seeing Part II as the way it ends may cut you guys deep.

For those who already read Part II I am sorry for the late warning. But for those who haven't yet,I advise some caution as you will cry I would assume.

Update:Well it seems that Raico has made an epilogue after Part II,really this enitre series has been an emotional roller coaster if I have ever seen one.

Last edited on 10 July 2017, 14:43.

Base +8, jfragrettel +8, 小帕5412 +6

Goddamnit, I came here to masturbate, not to feel

Base +10, Lexander +9, jfragrettel +8, jose1999 +6

hello darkness my old friend :'(
me duele el kokoro TwT

Base +6, Hammerjarl +6, jose1999 +6