Yay, someone with actual talent with editing (I had, and have no talent for it.)! Glad to see it (and see through my really, really rough translation!)
@Magiconvert - I still want to thank you for your initial translation, though. It let me enjoy the story a lot sooner than when the good folks at Gaku-Touhou were able to get to it. I personally don't have a problem with your translation and editing, which is why I linked it here so that others can see for themselves.
Stop by voile.gensokyo,org if you're still interested in working on Touhou doujins. They always need editors, and they're more than willing to help people who want to learn.
Base +6, Jadeysprite +6, ShinyToast +5, somercet +6, Rakned +2