Edit: Fixed major translation error on page 3 and some other small edits.

Nice job.
Even though I feel like this work was rushed out due to some of the untranslated text.
Spending one extra day having a proofreader look over your work will make a big difference.

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"Of course, my dad was against it." What you mean of course he was against it? Is he high?

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Is there anything better than cute, wholesome gyarus? (Well, like they said in the doujin, "half gyaru")

Her wearing lingerie in the bath and getting sopping wet was hot as hell too. Goddamn. That body, her cute personality... Amazing.

Also, seconding Ingloo's comments. There's a few spelling errors (percelman (I think it's... Parcelman?), tholught, etc) and some boxes look like they were cleaned and then typeset a bit hastily. But otherwise not too bad. Wouldn't take too long to fix.

Edit: Props to Angoose. Everything fixed. Text boxes look cleaner, errors fixed. Awesome.

Last edited on 05 July 2018, 20:51.

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cute sweet gyaru <3

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In some panels he forgot to draw the bandage. One example on page 9 where he is holding the towel in his injured hand which for some reason isn't bandaged, then just under that panel it is.

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@Iapan That's Mao's hand, not his.

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I fucking love Mushi's stuff. I think I'll just stop smoking and sub to his patreon or something

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@The Ultramind Guess I was the one getting confused

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@aleden, we definitely need more wholesome gyaru stories.

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Sweet gyaru is the best!

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Uncle and aunt? Aren't that her parents?

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Wasn't there a prequel to this? Like them meeting at the beach or something and sharing a shower or something.

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