There are 50% more pages than are really needed to tell the story, and the dialog needs some polish. Going through just the first 10 pages, page 2, 5, 6 and 7 do not need to exist. You can keep one of them, but not the rest as they add no additional information. Pages 8, 9, and 10 need to be combined into one page dialog wise, using page 9's image works for all three.
The same thing applies to the rest of the comic, with several pages being ultimately superfluous.
It looks and feels like an animation someone did, but took snap shots and posted it as a comic rather than a cartoon, hence the many extra pages of inbetween shots from point to point.