My first time doing this so go easy on me.

My first goal was to remaster Ichini-ni's translation of this work and make it fappable for myself.
I went through the whole translation bit by bit trying to find which things were changed and what
were in the original. I also took some notes from Jadia's comment in Ichini-ni's version.

That being said I still can't guarantee the translation is 100% accurate.
I hope there's someone in the comments who can give me some feedback related to the
typesetting and translation, so I can try and fix if there's any problems.

Ichini-ni's 50/50 translation/rewrite
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The Raw Gallery:
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I am truly fortune...

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What a story, Mark!

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@MightyHonks oops, it's always the smallest things. I'll upload a fixed version later and see if there's more errors.

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@JayGaeBolg
vacoom > vacuum on page 10
your uterus sure is obidient > your uterus sure is obediant on page 17
I brough you > I brought you on page 24

Sry if you already went through it and saw them yourself :)

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@iamsnowylee It's obedient, not obediant.
@JayGaeBolg "I still can't guarantee the translation is 100% accurate" What do you mean by this?

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@iamsnowylee Thanks! Fixing pages 10 and 24 for the next version.
@robypoo just that I'm still an amateur at translating

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there needs to be a sequel where the kid gets revenge

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@JayGaeBolg Hello, i've sent you a message on the e-hentai forums, I hope you take a look at it!

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I fixed the typos that were reported.
Thank you everyone who commented to let me know!

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Another shota has fallen today.

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tought > taught on page 12, first panel

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A fantasy setting almost always makes things sexier IMO

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*Inhales*

GET PREGNANT!!!

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@FattyMcMuffing Thanks! Fixing page 12 for next version. Gonna wait a bit longer before doing it this time.

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My comment is too short.

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@Jadia Damn, that's a lot of stuff. Just goes to show how much I still have to learn.
Thanks for going through it! I'll make sure to make the fixes for the next version.

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The biggest tragedy is that he didn't fuck the shota as well.

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So I have done the fixes Jadia mentioned with a few modifications, so I think this is it for me. Probably going to move to a new project...

I want to thank everybody who helped me with the typos and translations.
Sorry for spamming the front page.
Happy Fappin'!

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Another cancerous netorare story...

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Mwuhahahahahaaaaaa!!! ^^ Masterful!

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@iamsnowylee

your uterus sure is obediant on page 17 -> your uterus sure is obedient

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With how much those damn shotas keep getting them busty girls, its finally great to see a Chad putting them in their place

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