interesting story and a bit rushed. The artwork and lighting is always very important when creating a CG comic and this one nailed it w/o making things seem flat and dull.
It also seems like the mother/daughter discussion frames are pretty repetitive in a back-n-forth frames the view and body positions on the scene never changes, so mix those up, maybe an over the shoulder with their discussions or something...
Also for these kind of stories, it would be interesting to see the gestation spaced over a series of chapters; like what about her not realizing she's been impregnated just yet. and it slowly having an influence on her body chemistry, making her keep coming back or doing more bold acts in private?
I think there's lots of room for more saucy adventures that way. But that's my two cents...
Thanks a lot for the constructive feedback! I really like your suggestions! This is actually my first attempt with a story attached and I definitely plan to try to make some more like it in future
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I really like it, especially since this is your first attempt at this sort of thing. I don't think it was too fast paced at all. When it's too drawn-out, it's tiresome. That being said, I love the part about the actual fertilization. Most others just have the aliens lay eggs inside her and that's just not the same.
It would have been great to see the alien sperm fertilizing her egg ""for real"" instead of just some 2D clip-art, though.