Art/Comic by Anonymouse https://www.pixiv.net/member.php?id=5826125
Character by Wherewolf https://www.pixiv.net/member.php?id=4255153

This is my first translation (and upload) so critique as harsh as possible.

Very nice!

Does this artist commission?

Base +6, tracingthelines +7, glowingdemon +6

Very nice. Thank you. And thanks too for publishing it in the right order, unlike a certain guy.

About critique:
Nice image cleaning and text integration job. Maybe not enough margin, as your text is sometimes touching the border.

Maybe you should write your script in a text processor first, let it proof grammar and vocabulary, and then insert the corrected text in the image.
Here's a list of errors I found:
page 6: "No matter how stuborn the woman, ..." is missing the verb "is". Also typo in "stuborn".
page 8: typo "girlfreind".
page 8: typo "to/too" mistake (or typo).
page 10: typo "falut".
page 11: typo "finnaly".
page 18: typo "destoryed".
page 22: "your/you're" mistake.

Keep up the good work!

Last edited on 19 May 2019, 16:56.

Base +7, Gamr13 +6, gwasp +5, tracingthelines +7, Saint Heaven +6

Are you going to translate the second part? Thanks a lot

Base +6, glowingdemon +6