This is my first ever translation of a doujinshi. Let me know what you guys think when it comes to the translation, as well as the editing. Besides that we once again get an amazing chapter by Usuki and I can't wait for the next one.

Great job on the translation.

Really like what Usuki has been doing with the story, it always feels fresh and interesting.

I love that this shows the twisted nature of a succubus probably more than any other doujinshi i have seen.

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I was reluctantly sure i was going to like this one... but after little cute fang with tongue in page 5 i knew i was going to love it!!!

Everything i want in a demon/succubus girl ia right here: The seductress body, the lewd outfit, the in-control femdom yet the willing to serve attitude and progresive way to escalate the sexy scenes from hot to Hellish Eros.

Usuki really is giving his all with this new work... also you Wasoki: you just pick the right work and deliver us a Diamond..

Thanks!

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I hope this doesn't end with her finding some guy who miraculously survives cumming in her.

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Max A Million: this is not possible, unless she does want it (but she doesn’t: her goal is always to kill her preys at the end, after having played with them).

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A proper succubus story, with no magically virile MCs in sight. We see enough doujins where the girl loses to dick, and this is one of few plots where she really should be the winner.

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Pad your page numbers, stop saving b&w in jpg, dont resize below 3k if the raws are good...
See here:
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Wait wait wait, she said "until next time" did she actually spare the poor boy (that would be a first for this character !) Or is she talking to the audience ?

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Its more like towards the audience. In the original she say sth like "Im full, good bye, good night."

Last edited on 07 September 2019, 16:10.

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That's pretty decent for a first translation. You should get a proofreader though. Ex: p20 "Tomorrow I am free because of you..." It doesn't really matter if the the translation is slightly inaccurate as long as the reader see in it a hot hentai in proper english.

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@baroOT Ah, look at that. I actually did check it again but didnt see the mistake. As for the inaccurate part: I dont translate it word to word. I take the meaning and put it into my own words. Some people might not like that, but I personally think a lot of doujinshis suffer from either words repeating over and over again or from words/sentences not being appealing to the eye, if you know what I mean. Still thanks for the adive and the compliment. Right now I am thinking about redoing the first three parts. They might have already been translated into English, but just to have them as a collection would be nice I think

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Nice one!
Btw, I don't think that she killed him.

Why should she say "Until next time" to a corpse ?
Looks more like he sitting on the couch, hangig his head in shame/anger/..., doesn't it !?

Especially since she says "Good night!" at the end, she seems to be more interested in emotionally torturing* than killing him...

Definitely needs a sequel ;)

@uploader
" Some people might not like that, but I personally think a lot of doujinshis suffer from either words repeating over and over again or from words/sentences not being appealing to the eye, if you know what I mean."

THIS!
Please keep up your good work!

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omocha-no-one: the whole sentence is “I’m full, until next time” (when she will need to “replenish” herself). She’s not talking to the guys (and regarding her, there is absolutely no doubt that she killed them all, including the bullied boy, even if we have not see him in a dried out form). She’s just looking at the bodies, nothing more.

uploader: a good translation is not word to word, BTW. It must make forget that the text is not originally in another language. Therefore, you could have done a way better work than the majority of translators, here. But I can’t read Japanese to do a proper comparison.

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Well it might not of been a happy ending but at least the MC had one (Gets pelted by rotten fruit)

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{Esther} This... feels like hate speech, to be honest. It's something I'd expect from back home, if anyone back home actually thought succubus feeding was lethal. Back home, it'd more likely involve some wild fantasy version of turning them into monstergirls instead. The twisted manipulativeness and fundamental untrustworthiness is *super* familiar, though. I know this may come as a shock, but we're actually just people. People who are monstergirls and demons -- that is, monstergirls more closely related to the Demon Lord -- sure, but just... people. We're not inherently evil, we're not some dark perversion of the natural order, we just need semen instead of sleep or food. And, well, kinda think turning people into monstergirls is neat, but that's a pretty universal effect of corruption, from what I understand, and not specific to succubi.

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@thowok The readers. After every story, she always gives her good nights.
She doesn't ever leave food behind.

If Hijiri had asked to be saved or left alone, she would honor the wish, despite her main goal is actually him That is why se asks in a misleading way.
If he felt safe, he'd say to kill them or save them, but "them" wouldn't include himself. She'd get the snack in the end.

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Who didn't see that coming? We all knew she was going to eat them all. XD
Yeah, Hijiri should have run away as soon as she started on the other 2 guys, he likely still wouldn't have gotten away, but I think the story would have been more fun if he made a run for it. XD

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