I was doing a translation of this (very slowly), then saw another uploader also did it. I read a comment that poor grammar translations often discouraged other translators from offering their own translations later, and that a higher quality write-up might never appear. Bearing that in mind, I finished my work, with the hope that the dialogue and narrative sounded a little more natural to a native English speaker. I have this idea of searching around, finding various works with the "poor grammar" tag, and attempting to produce a more natural write-up.

This is intended to have slightly better grammar and a more idiomatic use of English than its existing translation. Let me know if the typesetting needs work--as I'm a little worse at that--and let me know what you think.

TL note: P-head is you and that is your own cock, dear reader.

Raw: /g/1468178/ae7e81b9e1/
Previous English translation: /g/1489470/dfaadf8439/ by CGrascal

Thanks for this fix, it's a lovely scene which deserves a good translation. Glory hole table - such a hot fantasy! And good x-ray on p. 32.

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This is much appreciated. Thanks.

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jesus

this doujin is the epitome of savoring the dick

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Oh fuck my dick

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Anyone else kind of expecting her to just take out a knife and fork and start literally eating it? No? Just me? Okay.

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I admit I was a bit worried about having missed a snuff tag, but the star rating told me otherwise

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这是什么奇特的play？

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Holy fuck, that expression on p.17
Every goddamn time ( = ワ=)

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She must have ordered the spotted dick.

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