This is my first time making a comic like this. feedback would be appreciated and thank you for reading.

The painting needs strengthening😅😅😅

Base +6, No Talent +5, AlexJoe +6

Putting aside the obvious need for practice when it comes to art, the panel layout is too dense.
Any more than 10 panels on one page is too much in too small of a space. I'd also recommend keeping it to around 3 rows, with no more than 3 panels each (usually). That's just some basic feedback for now. Anything more advanced wouldn't be worth your time at the moment.

And happy new year.

Base +7, pooter23 +6, No Talent +4, AlexJoe +6, farfetchdfreak +10, I1EOtO +4

Thank you very much. I shall practice more to improve my art. I hope everyone has a great 2020.

Base +1, Foremann +2, No Talent +5, AlexJoe +6

I'm gonna be brutally honest here:
Plot and story: A+, almost an S. Some situations were the typical fetish stuff and others were truly surprising like punching an open blister to get the attention of Hinoka.
Art: D, maybe a D+. It's hard but it's the truth. I believe anyone can improve as long as they get their noses to the grindstone but that's on you. I hope to see these one in the future, reworked.

Keep the spirit.

Base +7, No Talent +5, AlexJoe +6, I1EOtO +4

Thank you for your honest input, diamond. I made this comic four month ago and I wanted to see how others thought of it. I know I can do better than this now and I shall work on the sequel. I hope you have a nice day.

Base +1, No Talent +5, AlexJoe +6