Translation & Editing: Kenren
www.YakuDou.com
Commission Status: OPEN

出英文了，那中文也不远了？

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Thank you so much for your translation! Always nice to see some love for Hinako’s series. I did a fast reading and have some points about the translation below.

Pag 13: In this page I believe Takahiro’s is now thinking about the day of Hinako’s birthday(page 12 was about the day she bought presents for his). Ano ato Hinako ni denwashite mo denakattanda. Maybe the “mo” indicates the second time Hinako didn’t answer the phone. Also, by context of chapter 6 and 7, the birthday that he is mentioning is Hinako’s. He had a business trip in the same day. Also in chapter 5 we see that Takahiro and Hinako spent their time together in his birthday.
Pag 14: Hanako instead of Hinako
Pag 14: Again, Hinako’s birthday here.
Pag 24: The one who is about to cum is Hinako.
Pag 29: She is actually begging him to pull out and cum outside. 抜いて

Last edited on 06 March 2020, 15:55.

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She's been a lost cause without a guilty conscience for quite a while.

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Hmm...I'll need to check this author's manga history to get an idea where this is going.

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Well, shit. I'm not really sure. Most of his translated stuff is either incest or Oh! My Goddess and unfinished for the longer stories.

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@bengije
I only did this for editing practice. So yeah, I got a little lazy with the translation and I don't know the previous stories.
You have my permission to make those changes and re-up it if those things really bothers you that much.
You can only change the things you mentioned though, you cannot give yourself credit for anything.

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TFW the translator thinks he owns the copyright of the pirated work he has translated.

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pretty shit

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