This is a rewrite with a the rearranging and editing of the pages.

Pg. 10
Zelda's dialog: "Yes! Shoot it all inside me! I want this more than anything! Don't hold back!"

Zelda's face: "Shit, I think that milk was past its expiration date..."

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A rewrite that is low res and poorly typeset/edited.
This is the Triforce of a Bad Upload.

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I'm fine with rewrites but could you make it good? Maybe not make the text comic sans?

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For what purpose? Who and what are this for?

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I think you confused "strive" and "strife"

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dr. bigg:

No I did research the word to be sure I chose the right one.

MightyHonks:

Well as I said, I started first doing rewrites of the Dragonblood series to come up with alternate stories that weren't entirely depressing. But then I decided to have a go at doing this, thinking I could quickly complete it.

Last edited on 24 April 2020, 18:41.

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