language: english translated
parody:Kimetsu no yaiba
character : mitsuri kanroji shinobu kochou
group :lupus-sensei
female : beauty mark female only sweating tribadism yuri
artist : kaishaku

A yuri pairing I didn't know I needed.

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Page 2:
"Bug
gathering in the light,
they fly higher as they flap their wing [...]"

Page 2:
"Especially i loved Taisho era, my own manga happen to be Taisho era too [...]"

Page 2:
"[...] but as I moved my hands, I realize I couldn't see the girls with H's eyes... and end up it became a Yuri H Manga."

Page 3:
"at this time"
"bugs"

Page 4:
untranslated stuff

Page 5:
"she attracted to this sweet honey"
"so you've come"

Page 5:
"enter the demon slayer squad that have extremely high mortality"
"to find someone who is stronger than me"
"enter the demon slayer squad that have extremely high mortality"

Page 6:
"her temperature"
"seem there's no fever"
"i think she will be able to move immediately because of her full focus breaths exercise"
"her body really strong"

Page 6:
"seem there's nothing to worry"

Page 6:
"even though we are the same, woman"
"this slender arm"
"it's have multiple strong muscle"

Page 6:
"a person who unable to control emotions is immature person"

Page 8:
"as expected she recover very fast"

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Yeahhh, I had no idea what kind of script I was reading. Sounded like it was translated from Chinese to be honest. Wasn't exactly cleaned well either. Looked like rectangles were copy-pasted around using MS Paint. Oh, there's even a patreon link. ....And it's in Comic Sans. Great.

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@Dead-chan
Lets not forget the downsampled images and zero effort in cleaning the raw.

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"english"

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Commission a translation from your group? Seriously????? Who is that stupid after seeing this piece of S**T?
I wouldn't consider to commision a translation from your group even if Christmas and Easter were to fall on the same day and hell would freeze over.
I'm a bit crazy but not that crazy!

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Holy Engrish, Batman!

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RAW /g/1575309/a4d78dd2fb/

Thanks for the TL but please take what Dead-chan said seriously, you need a proofreader and better editing skills. Particularly if you want people to give you $$ on Patreon. Most releases here are totally free and tend to have less problems. So, good start, but... try to get better, ok?

Oh, and the same issues (grammar, editing) were pointed out to you in comments for your previous release: /g/1685781/f18e170bf3/ So the fact this has the same issues is disappointing

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The translation is appreciated and everything has been said and done but please reconsider uploading things in this state. At least look for a proofreader that can actually speak proper English. It doesn't have to be a native, but... This seems like a bad poem badly translated, I don't know, I get that feeling.

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her gaze on page 11 gives me chill and a boner

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me who read this a long time ago and realized that something is off

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