Typesetting and TL from me
Cleaning and redraw by AC from Scan DNT group (Thx again for it)
Corrections are appreciated.
Original: /g/1562439/ec150efb7d/

EDIT: Corrected the Typo's on the pages 7, 10 and 18. Uploaded a new torrent too.

page 7: should be "Did it feel so good"
page 9: no idea what the "tic" is supposed to be...
page 10: should be "It's bigger"
page 18: I think it would flow better with "it's" than "it is"

the sentence structure also feels quite off...

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I don't get why this has a sole male tag when the girls are fucked by two dicks at the same time in some pages.

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@tomato86: Tic is a word for a weird habbit / taste.

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Tic in English has a sense more like habit or behavior, it has nothing to do with taste.
"His Tourettes gives him an involuntary verbal tic. Don't give him too much shit over it."
"I drag out my sentences too long. It's a bad writing tic I have."
Yes, the raw uses tic, but many English words used in Japanese do not maintain the sense they have in English. This tends to be why literal translation is bleh.
It should be swapped to something like taste/fetish/kink.

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Page 10 should be "bigger than usual," not "then".

I agree that the translation is overly literal. Take page 5: "Come on... It is special." This is pretty much exactly what the Japanese says, but makes no sense to an English reader. From context the "it" is Chika stripping and in Japanese that's enough. In English though I would go for something like "Fine... Just for you." Still giving that impression of the event being special while also making sense in context.

Edit: Thanks for the translation though! That came out more critical than I meant it to be.

Last edited on 07 August 2020, 10:03.

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for god's sake, get an editor =))
thank you for translating btw :D

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>Left aligned type
W-why not center the type, like every other doujinshi/comic out there? Never made sense to me why people do this.

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Whew lots of criticism, but they're all true tho. Appreciate the translation job anyway tho

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Thank you for this.

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For all the inherent skeeviness of a CYaRon fan orgy manga, Ruby's line about "Mr. Penis" made me feel dirtier than usual.

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