Commissioned by: Kararara
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As an editor for the Little White Butterflies scanlation group, I see two main problems with the doujin: the file size and all the text bubbles in the doujin.

First off, the file size: it's way too big. The original (which you linked to, by the way) is only 61.78 MB. Yours is nearly double, at 118.8 MB. That's because your files are RGB color rather than Greyscale. Save your final files as 32 or 64-color Greyscale PNGs to cut down on bloat. The general rule is that your project shouldn't be significantly larger than the RAW it's based off of.

The second and most egregious problem is the fact that every single bubble still has grayed-out Japanese text in them. EVERY SINGLE ONE OF THEM. From the sex moans to the dialogue bubbles, and everything in between, every single bubble still has the RAW text in them. I believe the main cause of this was that your brush tool wasn't set to 100% opacity, so you thought you were whiting out text bubbles, but in reality, you only did it partway. Either that, or your monitor brightness wasn't high enough, so you could see what you were editing, but not bright enough to see the leftover Japanese text inside every bubble. Also, I noticed several other projects from SDTLs that have that same problem, which is a huge problem to have.

A minor problem I also see is that the scans aren't leveled. While the blacks may look sufficiently dark, the whites have grey noise in them, particularly around the frills of Rosetta's dress and her cleavage. Leveling your scans should alleviate that problem: http://www.ruinevil.com/rawr/editguide/1.html#3.

Flaws aside, it's not a bad doujin. I do have minor gripes with fonts, centering of said fonts, and moansetting, but they're not deal-breakers. If you have any questions you want to ask me about editing, feel free to PM me on the e-hentai forums.

Last edited on 10 September 2020, 22:05.

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Had a longer reply but it got lost to a soft-reset so I'll go with the short version: "No, I really don't"

Thanks and all but they are just minor grips that you find because you know and get involved with it, your average reader won't notice or mind, if I was working for your group I understand withholding your standard of quality but I'm not and it's just the way I work, bonus, this work was with the involvement of the person who asked for it since it was a favor for them, and they were quite happy, so that's a job well done.

Last edited on 10 September 2020, 05:16.

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when you cant nail the dad so you nail his son instead

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