This is a translated work. This is my first work and is direct download to this ( /g/1448284/3ec5d1a063/ ) gallery. Thank you for reading, please feel free to contact me at [email protected] if you have concerns or comments that I need to be aware of. I welcome proofread comments as this one was only done by one person. Please suggest any Milf or other manga in email since I RARELY read comments here. Thank you!

How the hell does it have torrents already? This is FREAKING AWESOME!!! I have NO clue how to make torrents. THANK YOU!

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@Tim The Wizard

As an editor for the Little White Butterflies scanlation group, I see 3 main problems with your gallery: your filesize, your non-leveled scans, and your typesetting. First, your filesize is way too bloated at 134.4 MB. The raw which you linked to is 43.42 MB, less than a third of your filesize. The reason why your files are so bloated is because they're saved as RGB color instead of Greyscale. Save your files in greyscale and export them as 32 or 64-color B/W PNGs to cut down on bloat. The general rule to follow is that your project shouldn't be significantly larger than the RAW files.

The other problem is that your scans aren't leveled. I can clearly see parts that should be white be gray instead. Level your scans and your pages will look a million times better. I even took some time to level one of your pages to show you what your project should look like (bottom of page 9): https://puu.sh/GspaO/aeb6d7b03c.png

Lastly, your typesetting. Your font size is way too large, crowding bubbles and making it really hard to read. Unnatural breaks with words, triple-digit font size (I'm guessing your font size is at least 120 point, which no project should ever have), and issues with centering text as well. To remedy your font problem if you're using Photoshop, resize the image by going to the top menu, then go to "Image", then "Image Size", and adjust the resolution to 200 or 300 pixels/inch WITHOUT resampling the image. Your font sizes should shrink to a more reasonable number. Once you've adjusted your font size, make sure that your fonts aren't too big or too small, and focus on centering your text without having your words break unnaturally. I did a quick touch-up of one of your pages to show you how your fonts should look using the same "Wild Words" font you used in this gallery, also on the bottom of page 9: https://puu.sh/Gsptu/3a40e2c346.png

One more minor gripe to make: your translation feels unnatural in places, with some parts sounding clunky or weird. You can always go to EHCOVE and have your translation checked by a member of the Scanlators' Cove so that other translators can give you advice on how to improve your translation.

Here are some guides to help you improve your editing:
https://discord.com/channels/616922698626367488/616929720944033793
https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/
https://forums.ehentaihip.cc/index.php?showtopic=68725

All in all, not a bad work, but it could be better.

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Thank you very much for the email and comment. I have a lot to work with now and this helps my manga work also. I may trouble you in the future @THDragon with leveling help.

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This is a good first work. The "sound effect" font you used (like "Hugs" at page 7) feels a bit weird, but beyond that, (and what THDragon mentioned) there's really nothing I'd complain about.

Also, I feel I must give a shout-out for picking up this doujin to translate; Nme's furry stuff has always been a favorite of mine, and many have remained untranslated for years. I even had a bounty up for this one a long while back, but it expired without me noticing (I did typeset another of Nme's works before; Kouen no Bagatelle).So, if you're planning on doing any other Nme/Greonne doujin, do PM me so I can put a bounty for it. I like rewarding those who translate these kind of obscure works.

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Enjoy this Engrish.

Not that I could do any better at the translation, and I've seen and read significantly worse. This is good enough to follow, just a few tense issues here and there, but overall not bad.
Also a cute story. ^_^

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Isn't more weird for them to be in their human forms because they still have four fingers?

I wish the one with the kids had this kind of ending.

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Apologies for not including this information, I didn't translate this manga. I will send this information to the translator. I'm the typesetter and redrawer.

Thank you everyone who commented. More information makes future releases even better.

@Blake81 Do you have a font to suggest? Improving my typesetting is always a plus in my book. Unless I find another NME work that is not pedo bait, I am more than willing to do it! Sadly, those have been translated. I'll send this information also in a PM.

After looking over their works, it looks like there are two (one for sure) that I plan to pickup. I've got to check with the translator to see what they say.

Last edited on 14 September 2020, 18:21.

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