Raw: /g/1281408/d2ac903828/

Base +39, MelmothTheWanderer +18, Shank +38, Hawlc +6, TheOldDeus +7

Other Language
Japanese raw
Korean
Chinese translated by 沒有漢化
English You are here!

Base +33, Tomsod +8, Shank +38, hyliades +7, TheOldDeus +7, hexianford -6, GOMENASAI12 +7

Gum condom is super effective and GOD I wish that were me!

Base +9, Hawlc +6, something-creative +6, Nobody_Know +7, ill.eagle +6, aych001 +6, zarazza +6

Grammar errors:
Page 27 "I'm so gald your happy Kay!"
Page 28 "I'll violate your womb with my seen!!"

Base +6, Hawlc +6, SenpaiNM7 +6, LargeBirthdayCake +6

According to the RAW, his name is Takashi, not..."Tekashi" lol.

EDIT: After another quick glance at the RAW, there are more errors.
Here's some on page 14:
Panel 1: he's saying he's going to go rough
Panel 3: it's not "I want you Alisa" "Me too" (as a matter of fact, there's no mention of her name in that panel). It's the two girls saying "I'm getting kinda turned on" "Me too"
Last panel: the bottom speech bubble is from Takashi asking if she's going to have her first anal orgasm

That's just the one page I looked at before going to bed.

Base +6, Hawlc +6, llllonnnngggg +7, SenpaiNM7 +6, as102 +12, PuddingCups +6, zarazza +6

I know there is many errors in this, and that's because I cannot read a single line of Japanese. This entire thing was Google Translated and many of the lines came out unintelligible, so I had to take some creative liberty and make my own lines.

Base +2, qazzy5 -23, Hawlc -6, llllonnnngggg -7, Entei Nevermore -6, toom -11, SenpaiNM7 -6, Aihara_Enju -9, Chunga -18, Fathag -6, edson -14

in other words, this is a rewrite isn't it?

Base +17, Hawlc +6, llllonnnngggg +7, Entei Nevermore +6, Unst99 +12, toom +11, Marz +6, bigscuba +7, lazorboy96 +6, as102 +12

@FluffySharks
Then why even try to translate it?

Base +2

@sleazeball
Because it hasen't been translated yet?

Base +2, Hawlc -6, SenpaiNM7 -6, Chunga -18, cf230 -6, BakaG -6, Rankarana -7, Marz -6, LargeBirthdayCake +6, ChaseRaph69 -4, Purple98 -6, netherian -7, pond39267 -6, and 4 more...

@FluffySharks And now you've basically ensured that no-one else will do an actual translation* of this doujin, so we're stuck with your shit release. Good job, I guess?
Also preventing the reply "why so serious, it's free so something is better than nothing" I say no, a free meal with shit mixed in is worse than nothing, because you've wasted the ingredients.

* any translation, even shit ones, massively decreases the likelihood of any future version because translators – not wanting to waste their time – focus on the untranslated works, and in search results hack jobs such as this one appear the same as real translations.

Base +25, Hawlc +6, llllonnnngggg +7, czerkill +10, Unst99 +12, toom +11, SenpaiNM7 +6, Fathag +6, Purple98 +6, BakaG +6, Th3 Sl0th +6, Rankarana +7, m42a +16, and 14 more...

@JukanX; you and other 24 uneducated vocal minority (also 1600favs, vm never realize they are minority) need to be taught
/g/2214407/1fb8cdc13c/ got 3 english translations. if even good translations doesn't stop other from making their own translation, this is proof that poor translation shouldn't prevent this from getting a better TL..

Base +14