Fixed: /g/1791027/e5d8892a3d/

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>All you need to do is pretend a little bit when on bed
"when on the bed" would sound better, maybe?

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>If he keep playing with me like this
"if he keeps playing with me like this" is better, I think.

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>I had multiple orgasms so many time
"so many times"

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>I got myself a lot of monet today
money

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>I just take it in and you cum already?
"I just put it in" take it in makes it sound like he's the one getting dicked.

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>This sensation of a young girl's pussy clamping hard om my dick is unbeatable
"on my dick"

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>Afteral, the real sex is...
"After all, real sex is..."
>When you direcly connected!
"When you're directly"
>Besides, I'm sure I won't be able be impregnated that easily!
"Besides, I'm sure I won't be impregnated that easily!"

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>...I though
"... I thought"
>Tapi after that
"But after that"
>It's not long
"It wasn't long"

My English isn't very good but even I felt like the dialogue was kind of weird, I guess you translated it to Indonesian from Japanese then translated the Indonesian to English so the sentences felt strange.
Also, is past tense for cum "came"? I'm not sure if it's came or cummed, either way there's probably a bunch of cum here that should be in past tense.
Thanks for the translations.

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Yeah dude.
Try to do it without proofreader, doesn't end up so well.

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thanks anyway lol

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>All you need to do is pretend a little bit when on bed
>plays with her mobile

This is not how you pretend to be even a little bit into it. Just lie back and think of England like a good slut.

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Her blond friend is cute, she really needs old man cock too.

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@BillNine10

She most probably does anyway, she did say she earned a lot of money yesterday so shes most likely the person who got her into it. And its actually a reality. Actually happens in modern Japan, compensated dating but some are willing to more providing it pays

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