This is my first futa manga ❤!

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@OP
If you are planning to continue, may as well submit your own artist tag for registration at forums. It's in 'Vigilante', there should be a subforum for tag suggestions, afair.

Oh, and - congratulations, and welcome.

Base +24, nico2927 +6, ceslzie +4, SkullDraecos +4, FoShizzle +7, crzyguy3 +6, reiiiii +6, kenry +7, Lurking Ankletaker +8, Berdiche +6, ShinAzure +6, 151132 +8, jeboiterdo +4

I like it, will you continue this one?

Base +4, hejjhajj +2, nico2927 +6, ceslzie +4, SkullDraecos +4, jeboiterdo +4

Thank you so much ❤ Yes I'm working on it so stay tuned for the next pages.

Base +2, hejjhajj +2, lionkinggod9000 +6, nico2927 +6, ceslzie +4, AnonimousFan +6, Blank_1 +6, iBoomtaker -6, Eddvn2 +5, jeboiterdo +4

This is fantastic! Can't wait for more

Base +6, nico2927 +6, ceslzie +4

I was skeptical at first, but the quality improved surprisingly quickly over only a few pages. (This gallery has 6 pages total at time of writing, and page 6 feels like a dramatic leap in quality compared to the rest.)

@FutaScript: Admittedly I'm not an artist myself, but if my advice is worth anything, I'd recommend using less of whatever brush type you used to make the grass and road on page 2. It stands out. And background scenery isn't really supposed to stand out. It feels like at the start of the comic, you were experimenting with a whole bunch of styles, but whether intentionally or coincidentally, you narrowed it down a lot, and I'm happy with that. The way you draw Lina's body is really good, and it becomes more obvious that you're good at it in the pages after her body starts growing and you start putting more of a focus on it. Her dick in particular is extremely well colored and shaded.

Now, regarding the writing: It needs work. Not trying to discourage you or anything, I think you can make improvements pretty easily. There's just a few obvious signs that your first language isn't english.
First: You're putting spaces in front of the question marks. Makes me think you might be french? In english, you shouldn't put a space before the question mark or exclamation mark.
Second: Sometimes you put two dots in a row (so like ".."). This might be a nitpicky thing, but it stood out to me. You should only use one or three.
Third: I think the "Aww"s might be out of place? I'm not sure about this one, maybe it's more common than I think, but I feel like the equivalent in english would be either "uhh" or "ahh".

Anyway, I hope this helps. I'm looking forward to the next few pages, I think they'll cement what direction this comic is heading in. (I'm curious to find out if her vagina is still there.)

Base +1, Wiseman2 +8

Ohh wow! That's a very nice comment *hardwonpeace*.

You are correct, I'm experimenting things and trying to find the right balance between *background* and *character*. I really love making backgrounds and sometimes I feel guilty to avoid doing that to keep focusing on the story.
I'm learning how to draw since august this year and this is my first manga ever so it's interesting to see that you already see improvements from page 1 and the next ones.
To be honest, I was very nervous for the first page and I try my best to be consistent. I'm glad you are liking the shading. I love shading and maybe it's too much for a comic but I wanted to keep that way and I hope you'll like it.

For the writing, you are 100% correct. I'm not a native speaker and I'm learning english too.
My native language is french and I didn't know those punctuation rules. Thank you ❤
Thank you so much for those advice, I'll think of it twice when I'll write my next dialogues.

I don't know the right expression for someone moaning or expressing a lot of pleasure. Maybe I should stick to *moan*.
You can expect at least 15 pages in total (my rough sketch is done).

You are not discouraging in any way. I just tell myself to not stop doing what I love and try to improve as I get new feedbacks so a big thank you for that. <3

Base +2, Wiseman2 +8, Cattapratta +10, ceslzie +4, MultivacMagic +9, Blank_1 +6, Lurking Ankletaker +8, SkullDraecos +6

I wonder how big she'll get :3

Base +7, ceslzie +4, Blank_1 +6, MultivacMagic +9

i just hope this is not one of the dime-a-dozen futanari that never show their female bits. the story is innocent enough.

Base +9, V972 +7, ceslzie -4, SkullDraecos +4, Blank_1 +6, D72 +5

If you say that you started to learn how to draw in august, that means this is the result of 4 and a half months of practice, yet something tells me you practiced way longer than that.

Base +6

I drew on paper from time to time for fun but I bought my tablet in april and I didn't used much until august seriously. So yeah for me I started learning seriously since august but I take that as a compliment! Thank you 🥰😍

Base +2, Blank_1 +6, ceslzie +4

Oh damn, the quality really jumped from 2/10 to a 6/10.

Base +6, flamincatturd +6, Blank_1 +6

I love this hopefully there will be a part 2 and she gets bigger

Base +6, onyxarmor -6, ceslzie +4, sovair11 +6

This is amazing, not only the quality improved a lot but the story kept a nice pace. I'm really looking forward for your future works

Base +4, ceslzie +4, sodmeva +6, hejjhajj +3, eltxamo +6

Congrats on completing your first chapter. The note at the end of the chapter makes it sound like it took a lot of work, and I'm happy that you were able to complete a project that you are satisfied with. I think the results came out pretty well!

I've got a question about page 15. How small is Lina's cock when flaccid? Does it disappear completely, or does it just shrink down to a more manageable size? Her cock seemed to be much larger on page 14 than what we see on page 15. So, why is she saying "Oh no! Not again!"? Is it because she thought her cock would go away for good after she was done in the bathroom, so now she's surprised to see it coming back? Or, is she just worried about having to deal with her cock's urges again? I'm hoping you can show us more of what's going on with her body. To be clear, you don't need to tell us everything right away, just explain it at your own pace, but let us see what's happening so we can start guessing ahead of time. I would've liked to see what happened between page 14 and 15 when they were cleaning up before retuning to class. You could show us how Lina managed to fit her cock back into her pants.

Base +2, TheCatman-Meow +6, ceslzie +5

Well done.

Base +6, ceslzie +5

Amazing hentai

Base +4, ceslzie +5

My favorite image(s) is(are) at the bottom of page 14. I really like how the angle shows her size of nearly leg length.

Base +6, ceslzie +5, Ms. Black Fire#10018 +6

Excellent work, just got done with reading your complete NNN for Lina as well. Great improvements all around.

Base +6, Ms. Black Fire#10018 +6