I retranslated this because the other English translation is very stiff and robotic.

Alternate Eng: /g/1714482/08efa598fc/

Let me know if I've made any mistakes and I'll fix them ASAP.

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Edit 1: Missed a bubble on pg 3 -> so close
Edit 2: (pg 2) one month age -> one month ago

Hentai Doctor, does great editing and redrawing, retranslates top tier doujinshi that have stiff or poor translations... The absolute madman. A lot of people skip over it because you don't get the same kind of attention rereleasing something than doing something new, so thanks for giving us good quality Mashiro doujinshi, because this artist definitely deserves it.

Looking forward to the sequel. This has been on my favorites, so I'm happy to update to the better version. It's just so fucking good - the pure, wholesome, happy couple in love. First times. Absolutely wonderful.

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Could you please give an example of which bubble is stiff and robotic. I'm not a native English speaker and both versions feel a bit the same to me.

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@Ununbium: Sure. A major part of it is that the other translation doesn't use contractions. For example, on page 2, the other translation reads "You will hurt yourself if you don't wear gloves". The lack of the contraction "you'll" makes this sentence sound stiff and formal.

The other problem is that the other translation tends to translate literally instead of contextually. For example, on page 2, they translate 小テスト as "small test" instead of "quiz".

Finally, there are just overall grammar mistakes. On page 2, the other translation writes "I wonder if are we really going out", which should be "I wonder if we are (we're) really going out".

These are all on one page, but the issue extends throughout the translation.

I've posted a list of grammar mistakes on the other translation in accordance with the poor grammar tag.

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More of Mashiro Shirako needs translating to be honest, especially the Rain of March series. The art is too good

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@ZedsShadow Ahh I see, thanks for the explanation.

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It would be nice to see more translated doujin from this author since the girls are cute

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Vanilla sex doujins are my lifeblood. They keep the world from falling apart. I thank you kindly.

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