Commissioned this a year or two ago to a well-known professional. POS took my money and ghosted me. So I took matters into my own hands. Enjoy.EDIT: Screwed up the honorifics in my original upload. Corrected version with some other minor edits. Sorry, my bad. Thank you all for the feedback.

I am unsure if I should tag this as femdom or not, lol.

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raw /s/b8a7da214c/891088-129

onii-chan = older brother
onee-chan = older sister = big sis

"onii-chan what are you eating? let your big sis have some." How is that even work, who is big, who is younger now?

p.1, p.2 in raw the boy referred to the girl as his older sister (姉ちゃん = older sister), and the girl called the boy by his name (陽ちゃん). So it is older sister and younger brother relate.

But you changed all the boy name when the older sister called him to "onii-chan" = older brother.

p.6 delusion panel, the older sister was masturbate, wanted the younger brother 陽ちゃん to cum inside her but you changed to "i want onee-chan semen" from "give me 陽ちゃん's semen in here"

changed relationship relation in 3 of 16 pages by change the name of character (younger brother name) to other word (onii-chan = older brother) that is not the character name and also wrong relation... this is the definition of rewrite.

edit: Amakuni vote- LMAO LOL good laugh.

edit: uploader removed vote-, Good work on fixing the translation.

Last edited on 14 February 2021, 04:44.

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@H0R0

I can see that this was a translation made of my translation and I really thank you because I can know what mistakes were made. (the Spanish community is not very active)

Well, I'm sorry to make that mistake, although I wanted to use a more "common" or more "recognizable" expression for the public in Spanish. "Onii-san" is more common (so to speak) than Ototo (although this is the correct form of translation).

Even so I think I should have made the corresponding annotation or used the correct expression to refer to the little brother (or just use an expression in Spanish)

Possibly also make the corresponding correction in the Spanish translation that I did. (Thank you very much for realizing that and it was not a rewriting, everything was translated as faithfully as possible)

(My Japanese is not very good)

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@metagros12:
japan and some east asia country family sibling interaction usually
younger sibling would call older sibling as older bother or older sister out of family respect.

older sibling would call younger sibling by their name, because they are older than the younger sibling. Some time the older sibling doesn't even use name.

like p.1 panel 2 the older sister was "Ah, what are you eating? big sis want to have some."

in this case even if changes "onii-san" to "ototo", it's still not correct since the older sister called the younger brother by his name, not "ototo" "younger brother" "little bro" or she didn't even use any referent.

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anything has
姉 = older sister

妹 = younger sister

兄 = older brother

弟 = younger brother.

with just 1 "word" it designated their relationship.

so p.1 panel 1 "my sister is" already loss the family hierarchy infomation.

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@Ookami28 its quite a bit more femdom than a lot of what gets tagged as such on this site already which is usually role reversal or just something with an assertive girl in the beginning most of the time.

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@H0R0

Well I think in that aspect I take a bit of liberty, because in Spanish it is not very common to use terms like older brother and younger brother, here the most common thing is to refer to them simply as brothers (without so many hierarchies). But when translating it, I should have done it without taking those liberties that Spanish gives me and making it more literal.

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p.14 2nd panel need translation 頭バカになっちゃいそうっ

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So, would this be considered masturbation?

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I just don't understand the thought process of the brother putting tape on the sister mouth and arms to jerk her off

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