EDIT: Fixed some pointed mistakes.

Thanks:
pzykosis666
anonymous

Contact:
[email protected]

raw:
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Mameojitan is sooo underrated, amazing artist! thank you soo much!!!

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Well, at least he's cured of his chuuni-ness now!

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Please tell me there's more of this.

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@gguy123
sadly no, but hope there's something like this one from the author soon, I'll be honest I didn't know about them before this one, but I fell in love with their art!

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male chuniis are so cringy

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Got fucked straight out of his Chuuni fantasies.

They got fucked right into sexual fantasies.

Looks like the Dark Lords Rod got the last laugh

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Pg 2 - Don't sit on the hallway -> Don't sit in the hallway
Pg 3 - Mistranslation: Don't look down the shadows -> You will be swallowed by the darkness
Pg 4 - Booties -> Boobies
Pg 4 - Mistranslation: What... Do you...!? -> What... did you say...!?
Pg 6 - If a peel off all the skin -> If I peel off all the skin
Pg 10 - What the hell you mean with punishment -> What the hell do you mean by punishment
Pg 10 - You just got horny after seeing -> You got horny after just seeing
Pg 11 - The president just faint. -> The president just fainted
Pg 12 - Mistranslation: Now then, please take consideration of this slutty bitch, alright? -> Now then, you'll forgive this slutty bitch, right?

This should fulfill the requirements for the poor grammar tag, but I don't think it deserves the rewrite tag.

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About the mistranslations thanks, don’t know why in the first one, I thought I read 舐めるな lol
About the booties, you read the raw, right? I guess so, He doesn’t say boobies, so that’s why she says “These are boobies” I thought I pulled off that change, but I guess I didn’t, :/

don't know if it's worth fix this anymore, but thanks for pointing out those mistakes

EDit: pzy didn't mind to fix them so... fixed

Last edited on 28 February 2021, 08:30.

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Good work with fixing the mistakes. My bad on the boobies part. Youre right about that.

The English in your translations can seem a bit weird at times. Even in your response above there are plenty of grammar mistakes. Are you a native English speaker? If not, make sure you have a competent proofreader.

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LOL chuunibyou to the max I wish I am this lucky back then.

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yes, I'm not native, I think everyone knows that already, that's no news, the proofreaders are though. I believe this still doesn't make them bad proofreaders, with these small mistakes. But everything was fixed in the end. Thanks

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The art is really well done, wow.

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Pg.9
She's literally eating that off the floor.

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Every page was just packed with things to look at. Really skilled artist.

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small quibble, don't limit translating やっぱり to as I thought, as I expected, or after all. Lean on your proofreader(s) to make the script sound more natural.

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Cured of his chuuniness but not herbivore beta gayness.
Calling a amazing first time his darkest memory
If every trauma was like that the world would not know war

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