If the TL is on the right path, the script is absolute trash. She is way too into it, and some parts make no sense (why's there a "seal" that says "you shalt never remove the suit", and then the last page says: "she grows to like it so much she'd never want to part with it"? It was never an option to begin with.) If the TL just derped up, welp. Trash.
Either way, nice art. Would do better without any text, though.