Apologies for the delay, I had a computer mishap and lost quite a lot of the TL.

Thank you for your hard work.

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Page 49 has a "his" too much and a missing letter.
Page 51 has some wonky wording with "see until when you can resist".
Page 53 should have a "that" after "could it be".

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What a wicked mother.

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The dark blue font is way too hard to read, even against a light background. This might have to do with the black outline making the letters harder to tell apart from each other.

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I think my monitor might be too bright, but I'll keep it at the light blue then. Someone told me that's easier to read.

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Page 95 needs an exclamation mark.
Page 98 has "have are".
"Foetus" is a reoccurring typo.
Page 108 has "you're turned", which should probably be "you've turned". There also feels like a word is missing.

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"Foetus" is, from a quick check on a dictionary site, apparently just a British spelling of fetus.

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实用的本子

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I think you can remove the incomplete from the title ;)

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Page 124 has dropped a "d".
Page 133 has a wrong name.
Page 135 has an "its" when it should be "it".
Page 138 has a wonky period placement.
Page 143 "must" -> "much".
Page 147 has "its" when it should be "it's", twice.
Page 153 dips into present tense for a bit, is that intentional?
Page 163 has an "its"/"it's" mixup.
Page 165 typoes "proudly".
Page 169 has a wrong name and "stimlulated".
Page 173 has a typo "head" when it should be "heat". And one of the lines has the wrong color.
Page 175 needs an additional space.
Page 178 has an "its"/"it's" mixup.
Page 181 has wrong name.

There are also a lot of pages with an inconsistent pronoun for the hero.

Last edited on 25 May 2021, 13:45.

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hmm, what happened top his Baby he impregnated his Mom with?

sadly for all thee pages she had so little action

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Prequel: /g/1886830/efae058dca/

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Comrade Claus, given the comment of "I'll return my child's soul to my womb" I think he somehow *became* the baby he impregnated his mom with, and from there was reshaped. No, I'm not entirely sure how that works either, or what that means for the "original" body, or why the body we see inside looks like his (beyond viewer convenience or something I guess). Wait, reading on "it's the form of the soul in the womb", so, more like a shorthand rather than what the baby actually looks like. And yeah, soul got transferred into the baby is what happend.

Anyway, good story, wish we got to see the daughter get pregnant and give birth, like she says she wants to in the last page.

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"Marka", really? "Marcia" is an actual girl's name, damnit. What a lazy demon king.

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@Stephen9001

that means he is his own daughter and sister

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