Raw: /g/1908200/884cc27e17/

New series of mind control ? Nice.

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The way Akitsuki Itsuki draws the eyes is incredible as always.
Thx for the trad

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秋月老师的新催眠本，好耶！

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nice, Akitsuki Itsuki, you really make my day become better

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TROUBLESO
ME

BOOKSTO
RE

HYPHE
NATION I
S FOR F
AGS

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Oh more mind control form Akitsuki, been waiting since the drills bully one, that had such a nice build up.

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Prompt translations are always good, but you could do with a proofreader. At the very least copying the script into Word/google docs to use the spelling/grammar check would help.

Pg 2: "Troublesome" and "bookstore" need hyphens if they're not going to be on one line.

Pg 3: "Misteries" -> Mysteries

pg 5: "Put your mind on it" -> Put your mind to it

pg 19: "tho" -> though

pg 24: "pf" -> of

pg 34: "hypnosis plays" -> hypnosis play (And honestly "Hypnosis play" isn't how english speakers would usually phrase it, but that's a more subjective call.)

On a slightly more subjective note:

On page 4, the wording in last bubble is kind of awkward. Maybe "Isn't it staged? I always got the impression they set it up beforehand."

Also, you seem to put the punctuation (like question marks and ellipses) on a seperate line about half the time. Is there a reason for this?

Happy to see you're continuing to translate though, these minor issues can only improve with practice.

Edit: Cheers, any translator who responds to feedback is good as gold in my book.

Last edited on 02 June 2021, 21:45.

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>hypnosis chains

This is a dangerous path. If they keep going, they might cause a Hypnosis Pyramid Scheme.

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Funniest part is I actually saw those mistakes and totally thought I fixed them (I'm kind of training an editor since this manga to avoid this, I've been very busy so I pretty much only translated and checked a bit), but well, I guess I just didn't but assumed I did. Well, the phrasing ones were my fault; I told him to change the english, but the original script is mine, after all.

Tho was on purpose, but I guess I should have just used the formal one.

Done.

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Amazing
He never fails to make a interesting story even with the over used mind control trope.

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Hyphenation is fine, just remember that you have to split words between syllables.

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New Akitsuki Itsuki?!!?!? LETS GOOOOOOOOOO

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What you guys don't expect is that this was all orchestrated by Iori, who made her friend into a pervert who thinks she hypnotized her. And in turn, this was actually a setup by MC Guy, who hypnotized himself to forget who he was until after both girls thought they had actual hypnotism.

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here before assholes expunge this in favor of compilation

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ENG Case 1: /g/1924709/79791ec196/ (You are here)
ENG Case 2: /g/2057864/32981bb5e0/
ENG Case 3: /g/2486172/de3acf3661/
ENG Case 4: /g/2489528/bddd29fa07/
ENG Case 5: /g/2492783/7c2c7e8aa9/

RAW Full tank: /g/2361461/3050a69933/

Last edited on 13 March 2023, 18:52.

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