A doujinshi where Keqing has a sexy time with her new married husband. Sex is the way they express each other love.

Sweet missionary sexy with my wife, Keqing!

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another doujin with missing pages again... still nice thou but i want know the start of stories

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Why is this tagged as rewrite?

For poor grammar tag, please list examples or it will be downvoted

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Tons of issues here. Missing pages, reduced scale images, inconsistent image size(!), lots of poor grammar and typos, title doesn’t reflect the original name format or even the original meaning, you don’t list the author or circle in the title, the dialogue’s translation doesn’t match up… Some of these issues are bizarre. I don’t even get how you’d end up with the weird jumps between image sizes. Did you download this from two different sites or something?

The most bizarre thing is that on your first page (3rd of original source), you inserted a weird text box that covers up the guy’s face. Why?! There’s not even any extra text to translate there or anything! Did the guy’s tongue turn you off or something?

This is a hot mess.

Poor grammar examples:

Page 3: “You must have fall for me so deeply”

Page 3: “That because you”

Page 4: “It just too good”

Page 4: “His fingers making my tummy feels tingkling”

Page 4: “Your inside… keep sucking my fingers in”

Page 4: “It time for my dick”

Page 5: “Your vagina walls… is squeezing me”

Page 5: “Your inside feel way too good”

Page 6: “I can’t get pregant [sic] just yet”

Page 7: “My dick feel so good”

Page 7: “My husband hot semen”

Many of these grammar issues have to do with incorrect usage of plurals and possessives.

If someone else wants to write up a longer explanation for why it’s a rewrite, feel free. The basics are that this translation expunged any reference to Keqing being a sex slave (which is so important, it’s in the title of the original), expunged the pages where she’s getting fucked by a bunch of other men, and changes the dialogue to be more about Keqing and her husband. I guess this is fine if you’re explicit about it being a rewrite, but you’re not.

This has a long way to go to be brought up to standard.

Last edited on 10 June 2021, 16:41.

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@Aleph Fish bro it's a hentai manga, not a fucking poem. If grammar makes your dick hard, go read Edgar Allan Poe or some shit. Get the fuck out of here

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The worst kind of weeb is the weeb that spergs out over "their" waifu taking more than one fictional character's cock (that they self-insert as) in their fictional pussy. Don't touch doujins if you can't deal with the content, pleb.

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i can't believe you guys downvoted me to death for speaking the truth. Let the poster do his thing.

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This is a pretty funny re-write of the original content, though it still works to get me off. For comparison, the original was more of a standard mind-break sex slave story where Keqing enters a contract of absolute obedience with a scummy guy in the usual sort of blackmail challenge. As per the genre, she falls, gets mind broken, and loses the challenge/bet, turning into an obedient sex slave.

The re-write and re-edit here removes some pages and changes the dialogue to be a vanilla love story with wholesome sex for the sole purpose of procreation.

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