For any inquiries, commissions etc. please contact me here: [email protected]

Commissioned by: anonymous

Artist's Pixiv: https://www.pixiv.net/users/81970

Raw: /g/1921841/572a119aa3/

RAW: /g/1921841/572a119aa3/

KOR: /g/1926873/18f06c033b/

CHN: [Aca個人翻譯] /g/1924536/3a42038227/
/g/1925100/3076699137/
[绅士仓库汉化] /g/1941539/0f94b10da2/

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Subaru is a girl too.

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my baby dont mess around

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adickted made me giggle, good joke

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poor grammar tag required, this isn't English. hey ESLs, stop translating shit into English, thanks

p5:
"I wonder how many people I've done this now with him."
"I can feel him get big inside of me"

p7:
"I got called by mom so suddenly"
"We've always got on" - this is close to a British term ("we're getting on/we've gotten on" as a way to say "we're getting along") but I really don't think this ESL was going for that lmao

p8 (and pages beyond):
"Woh" instead of "woah"

p10:
"If you go around all of us"

p11:
"It's gross by kinda hot"

p12:
"it's soaking inside"

p13:
"her insides are already soaking"

p15:
"adickted" - yes this is a joke, yes it's stupid as fuck, no it isn't in the raw

p16:
"no, you has been, you little slut"
"she's been came inside by over half the boys in class"

p17:
"he's going to cum... all inside of me..."

p18:
"Subaru, I'm gonna cum into you!"

p20:
"Mon's and my voices are mixing together."

I think that's sufficient, but it is by no means all the fuckups. 0/10 see me after class.

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I'd like the smooth pussy version too.

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@Daruna I'm a native British speaker, and I will admit there were a few typos. But some like one on p5 and p7, and then p13, p16 and p 17, p 18 are slangy terms I might use on a regular basis.
Sorry about the few typos (I will fix them now) but please don't make claims with grammar without knowing the culture.

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@Gondi:
I fail to see what culture has to do with grammar and proofreading your own script

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@ lapan Other than my few typos, which I admitted, I was saying that a lot of what he pointed out wasn't even relevant and if he knew more English culture he wouldn't have pointed that out.

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@Gondi

if you're injecting 'culture' into a translation that makes it read like shit to the majority of your audience, perhaps reconsider doing that.

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@daruna
If you and a few people think that a little bit of native improper language makes it hard to read, I am sorry to hear that. But thanks for the input. I have gone and fixed the few typos but kept the rest as I and the person who commissioned this likes them.

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Cool, me and anyone else who enjoys reading proper translations'll be waiting for Yosh's version.

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Guess I'll edit the smooth pussy edition for myself then 😞

Edit: Why the hell did you make the images brighter???

Edit 2: He used this (/g/1941539/0f94b10da2/) Chinese translation instead of the initial raw??

Last edited on 29 June 2021, 16:58.

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hahaha holy shit what

IT'S TRUE LMAO https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/800241942583181332/859483384002248735/unknown.png

Gondi fess up, did you telephone this from CN to EN??

hate to tell you bud but Hong Kong hasn't been British for a long time :'D

Last edited on 29 June 2021, 19:44.

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"native British speaker" my fucking ass. What a complete assclown.

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....QUACK!

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I usually don't complain about translations, but given the fact that someone fucking paid for this... At least proof read the damn thing.

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"Translation dump" indeed

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Native British=ESL

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Why my brain just put their voice in my head. I can't even speak Japanese.

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@Daruna what's wrong with "I got called by my mom so suddenly"? I'm also an esl (obviously), I googled and it seems to be grammatically correct, would "my mom called me so suddenly" sound more natural or ne more appropriate here?

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I'm still waiting for the properly translated Yosh version.

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Prequel
/g/1883338/b9d64f9a0d/

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missing tag, wrong oyakodon
doubt it is bisexual among parent

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