This is my first ever translation! Any feedback is appreciated. Part 2 coming soon. Enjoy, macrophiles! :]

Well done, can't wait to read the rest

Base +6, Tulipanzo +6

text alignment should be consistent. center alignment is the standard unless where necessary. you did alignment in bubbles and boxes differently when they should be aligned the same way.
line spacing should be tight, and the text itself shouldn't be so close to the edges.
if you decide to fix this, please do so before moving on to your next work.
thanks for the hard work, and looking forward to your improvements!

Base +18, fp555 +7, locky85 -6, Tulipanzo +6, henry1110 +6, dragoeragon +9, BobDringus +6

Not bad! thank you for the translation , hope to see the rest soon too.

Base +7