I'll get around to translating the second chapter of this series eventually. We need more of Homare's work translated

agree I need more

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Not judging the translation since I don't know the source material, but god damn is this terrible a monologue of a script.

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Shinji? Is that you?

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Hey, I'm guessing this is your first translation. Before you hop on the next chapter, please at least practice basic cleaning and typesetting skills.

For cleaning, you have to redraw when you remove part of the background. This happens a lot when you clean text that overlaps outside of bubbles (like moans). Also, don't just half-ass remove some text and leave the rest in. It looks ugly and lazy. For typesetting, a good first step would be to use a font that doesn't make me want to tear my eyes out. Wild Words is an excellent start.

I also appreciate your efforts to handwrite some of the moans, but it might be a little advanced for your first few translations. Just sticking to normal fonts should make everything look much cleaner until you get more practice.

Translation itself looks fine, but please don't forget basic punctuation (lots of omitted commas).

Here's helpful resources: https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/

We have to do gyarus justice. Best of luck.

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No way the guy is 12 years old lmao.

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@notrealz

You got problems...tear your eyes out? Stop being a gordon ramsey of free hentai translations.
If you commissioned this I would maybe understand, but JFC...even if you did commission this, I would call you a karen, cause you are giving off major karen vibes.

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thanks for the protips and for understanding notrealz. I will definitely be more diligent on the next one

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Shinji Ikari? xD

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"Is this the fabled 'hot-dogging' I've heard about?"

Nope. That involves the other end of the girl.

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Part 2:

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The font could have been better. Something about this font makes it look unprofessional.

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