Bad english bla bla bla, ok if anyone want to rework the grammar would be great .

Translation and other Hentai Here: https://hentaiforlife2.blogspot.com/

"Mom seems to suffer"

My brain fucking suffered having to read this English.

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Whether the English translation is bad or not, would it kill you just to link the raw and artist page?

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RAW: /g/1941881/b0ce2694a8/

If you know the grammar needs work, why didn't you look around for a proofreader before you uploaded this?

Anyway, here's a cleaned-up version of the first few pages. You may use these as a starting point, in case you plan to update this gallery:

P3
"Mom's having a baby", not "Mom had a baby". Present, not past tense.
"Today is a day of sales", not "Today was". Again, present, not past tense.

P4
"Pleased to meet you" might be better than "Regards".
"Welcome", not "You are welcome". The former is a greeting, while the latter expresses gratitude -- although it could technically be a response to his saying "Thank you".

P5
"That you need a mattress", not just "you need a mattress".
"What great muscles", not "What a great muscle".

P7
"Mrs. wife" might be a better form of address than just "wife".

P8
"Mrs. wife had hard sex while she slept so soundly, thanks to the sleeping pills" is a better way of phrasing "The wife is having a hard time while she sleep so soundly, all thanks to sleep pills".
"Who are you people" might be better than just "Who are you" because she's addressing several men.
"We are the 'Rape Demons', disguised as business trip personal trainers", not the singular forms.
"Will have a child with us demons", not just "demon".

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just fucking terrible translation, starting with the title

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Waiting for the "Husband is told he's fat by wife and daughter, loses weight to become chad" manga. XD

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@meow_pao simple, because it's a translation for myself , i upload that in the hope to see someone rework that better, but at this point i think people have just the time for comment not for do a stupid thing. So i will just continue to upload that without care

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@naruti049594893:

I can understand wanting to translate something for yourself, but if you were to have someone proofread your work, then:

1. You'd be able to continuously improve on your English by seeing the corrections that were made, and

2. You'd get better comments from readers.

Wouldn't that be a better result for you and everyone else?

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i mean you fix the grammar, so this means you listen even if is a bad english, so since nobody do the translation the choosen are this or learn the kanji . I do that in the hope someone will do that better

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My type of degen woman. Ty for sharing.

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God why isn't there a report translator button.

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Wait, if this has all the same hallmarks as the uploader's other "translations", how the hell does it have a 4-star average?

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