Raw : /g/1999841/054b11e8cf/
Pixiv : https://www.pixiv.net/artworks/89065991

First time translating and typesetting. It's mostly MTL.
This was a short one and a bit easier to do so I picked it.
Tell me if there's any errors or if there's anything that can be changed or improved.

That's a decent work. You made it look like a proper sentences good enough that i wouldn't even knew it's MTL if you didn't said so yourself. Keep up the good work, my dude.

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BEGONE T H O T

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Hide-and-Suck.

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Why did you translate it as $ ?? Why not write the actual amount of yen instead?

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I like how he called her out on her bs

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>mostly MTL
tagging rtl (uploader comment)

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