Page 29: dropped a "t". Page 40: misplaced "s". Page 42: "hear" is probably not the intended word. Also "the Sara" and "a training" is a bit strange. Page 43: the "was" leads to strange grammar. Page 46: stray "m". Page 54: Non erased japanese text, "usept" isn't a word. Page 64: "darkner" isn't a word either. Page 71: I can't help but think that "liked" is the wrong tense.
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