Hello everyone!

This is my first translation and I did it as a hobby so it might not be that good, but I hope to enjoy!

Raw can be found here : /g/1419143/07a40fadec/

I hope to keep on translating from time to time, so any feedback is welcome!

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whisperer is weakest demon type but gain power by fulfilling DESIRE

>hentailand
>yamada gogogo
>FEMALE knight archetype

oh, we already know where is this going

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Thanks for translating, Really good effort for a first translation I think.

If I had to nitpick:
Passable font but not the best.
Why would you replace the artist comments with credits instead of having a credits page?
There might be a text bubble at the bottom of page 10 that isn't fully cleared?
It might be time-consuming but properly clearing floating text greatly improves the translation.

If you want more in-depth advice there are guides for editing manga here: https://www.insidescanlation.com/backgrounds/guides.html
One of which I recommend is Kalendel's Idiots guide - https://www.insidescanlation.com/etc/the-idiots-guide-to-editing-manga/guide/main.html

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So this is how you draw hentai without ever drawing genitals...

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Ah yes, female knights and corruption, what an iconic hentai duo. I do like how even though she could slay dragons and other demons that attacked directly, she was extremely weak to a supposedly powerless demon due to bad compatibility. It's the first time I've seen a "lewd crest" designed to suppress lust though.

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The ending is kinda confusing. Did she become attached to the demon or something? Anyway good job

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This could be a metaphor for capitalistic society. An opportunistic entrepreneur (whisperer demon) find success in a niche market, expands to monstrous power and causes chaos in the society around them while they're free to do whatever they please and their initial customers become trapped in their ecosystem.

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@Monochromer No need to apologize, that was the kind of feedback I was hoping for, thanks for the advice I'll be sure to check out these links

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@Azure Flash: Wow this sure says a lot about our society

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I saw somebody post this link elsewhere, it appears to be a modern collection of scanlation guides. I imagine this will be more useful and up to date for learning. (I still see the Kalendel's guide at the bottom for beginners which is good).
https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/

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thank you!

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It's a happy ending for both the protagonist and the antagonist. And even the viewers.

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I don't know what this fetish is called, but it's a form of corruption, you capture a mother figure and chain her onto a demon who will breed her eternally.
If you are interested in a subtle variant of this fetish I can recommend:
Dungeon ni Deai o Motomeru no wa Machigatte Iru Darouka: Orion no Ya
and
Dungeon ni Deai o Motomeru no wa Machigatte Iru Darouka Gaiden: Sword Oratoria

The author behind this series share the same fetish. He highlighted this in the movie, and in the longer series there is clearly some plot about Ais' mother being captured and impregnated by the dungeon.

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If you think about it, this is actually a metaphor for Joker (2019). The guards (society) torment the knight (Joker) despite the knight being the backbone (birthday clown) of their civilization, all because of the knight's unwanted burden (mental illness). So finally the knight gives into her desire (kills a wall street executive on the subway), rejecting her cruel fate and living the life she always wanted to (killing a late night comedian on live television and then instigating a riot as a prequel to the dark knight trilogy).

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That was so hot I didn't even realise he didn't drew any genitals, this mangaka is really impressive

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