its my first edit in order to learn a new software any suggest to keep improving is well received, i fixed the first chapter a little so its more easy to read.

WOW! Good work, thank you! I really prefer the manga format :3
How did you do that? Which software did you use?

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oh wow an edit from longstrip to manga, pretty cool to see

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It requires a lot of effort to read the webtoon format on my phone's offline reader, so thanks for this.

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Appreciate the effort but the panneling is all over the place, it's hard to tell the order. I'd also make sure to finish up the borders of the panels and dialogue boxes.
3rd page is a good example, the third panel is lower than the panels to it's left so it's hard to tell which one has priority and the lack of lines to its sides is just ugly and then we have the lower panel, which goes after the panels to the left but it looks like it comes after the third panel.

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wow, this is amazing, I absolutely despise reading webtoons but this made it fun.

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i used affinity, while learning, so i know the first ones are messy but to keep learning but i wanted to finish before a month ended

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whats the difference between this and the tank that was unloaded in 2020?

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its the same, exept the format fixed to be readed as a normal manga instead as a vertical

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Try to make it more like the official manga version, you have too much white space everywhere

https://www.dlsite.com/books-touch/work/=/product_id/BJ212727.html

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since i used the weeb versión and im still learning the software, ill try, but that also could mean redrawing, since im doing alone as a practice it could be a little to much for the moment but ill try to improve a little more

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