Source :
https://*****(.)net/g/388553/

Raws: /g/2117589/559e1dc794/

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EDIT: More mistakes, I'M MORE POLITE NOW.

Why in the world would you use NH downsized and compressed images? Just download the archive on here (or just the torrent).

rough grammar - 10 mistakes

p.4 a lot strange things => a lot of. Missing "of", necessary word here.
p.4 happen => happened (the tense is in the past)
p.4 etto => not an English word, and it has equivalents in EN: "um...", for example.
p.5 kanata-san have a nice => has (verb has to be conjugated)
p.6 it's fit my hand => they fit in my hands (two boobs/ breasts = plural)
p.6 this clothes => these (plural)
p.7 i catch you => caught (past tense)
p.7 instead of it, when did you wake up => this is nonsensical. you need to rework this sentence.
p.7 i don't mean to => didn't (action happened in the past)
p.7 the brat is still have to be punished => this brat still has to be ("is" is unnecessary and you have to conjugate "have")
p.15 Onee-chan, it's start wet => starting to be/get wet (you have to conjugate)
p.16 and so am I => and so do I (in response to "I love you".)

Last edited on 14 February 2022, 22:34.

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