[Dokutoku no M] Magazine style doujinshi Dokutoku no Magazine 1ST [RasmusTheTranslator]

The ending was rushed, And i feel like the other guy wasn't needed. It would've been a better story if it was only about femdom, Adding the other character ruined the storyline especially sense his role took place in the last 3 pages

Posted on 27 February 2022, 17:00 by: Jenkitsune

Good themes and expressions. The story was nice but I feel like parts were missed or not interpreted as well as they could have been because of a sub par translation. The second page is completely untranslated and there is untranslated text on most of the pages. The chat bubble cleaning is very sloppy and rushed. The translation in general is lacking, plagued with sentences like "I just taught him a few stuff in bed earlier"

Art 7. Plot 7. Sexiness 8. Translation 3. All out of 10.

Posted on 19 March 2022, 19:49 by: RasmusTheTranslator

Hi @Jenkitsune

Thanks for the criticism! Japanese and English are both my first languages and they are perfectly done. I translated exactly what was written in the speech bubbles, so your critique regarding lackluster speeches applies to the original author, not me.

The second page is just disclaimer and copyright info written by the author, it has nothing to do with the story.

I agree regarding the somewhat sloppy typesetting, but that is because I wasn't paid very well. Subpar pay = subpar work.

Posted on 07 July 2024, 08:21 by: Deus Xongwei

And then the NTR at the end ruined it all.

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language:	english translated
parody:	original
group:	dokutoku no m
artist:	denchi
male:	bondage chastity belt drugs netorare nipple stimulation orgasm denial
female:	beauty mark big breasts bodystocking femdom handjob makeup netorare stockings tall girl
mixed:	ffm threesome group
other:	mosaic censorship