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EDIT: thanks for the fixes

Just a few comments:

1. TL is fine, but there's inconsistencies and odd phrasing that made me re-read some lines twice. Examples:

p.5 You first refer to him being under "Selfish's" [influence], then you refer to it as Jikochuu. It's Jikochuu in the JP version for both lines.
p.6 I know you're under the influence of the Jikochuu, BUT aren't you embarrassed [...]. Omitting the "but" makes the sentence like an "and", and really evacuates the main idea that he should feel shame even if he's not in complete control.

2. Please clean the borders. The scanner did a meh job, and it's kinda weird you'd go through all the trouble redrawing the transparent bubbles, but not go for the easy (yet highly distracting) border smudges.
3. Don't export your images as RGB JPGs. Your files are HYPER bloated right now (200MB for 18 pages?). Export black and white pages as PNG-8 and put them in grayscale.

Last edited on 22 February 2022, 15:46.

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