The other dude's translation of this chapter had a few errors and worse censorship, so I went and translated the less censored version from the tank myself.

Actually, the other translation is more accurate in some places and as accurate or worse as yours in other places. You both make mistakes, but in different spots. Also, you missed a lot of handwritten dialogue for some reason (and an unfunny meme on p.20).

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Lol y'all gonna downvote me to oblivion, but I can prove that my translation is superior. For one, mine is actually almost the same to the other dude's; I mainly just used different wording to set mine apart from his. The main things I fixed were just pgs. 2 and 9.

Pg 2 (other translation): "Otoguro is really scary...the academy's best has been said to be a sadist"
Pg 2 (mine): "As expected from Otoguro, the school's No.1 sadist"

They weren't calling her the "academy's best" like she's their best student, wtf; they were calling her the most sadistic person at their school. Yeah I left out the "she's scary" part but who fucking cares lmao; you can already tell just by looking that they're afraid of her.

Pg.9 (other translation): "You look more like a woman than usual. I guess those male hormones didn't make it to your penis, huh?"
Pg. 9 (mine): You look like a girl, but your dick is above average. I guess all your male hormones are in your penis, huh?"

She's surprised that a girly-looking boy like him is packing heat. If he had a baby-dick like the other translation implies, then she wouldn't be surprised. Also yeah I didn't bother with the handwritten shit; they were basically just saying "I'm cumming" according to the other dude's translation so who cares lol

Last edited on 07 March 2022, 05:09.

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Why did you bother at all?

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Ok. I'll give a sample where your TL is equal, worse, and better. I'm not here to bash you, just to show that there's rough spots in both TLs. I can go through the entire thing if you want me to.

>Also yeah I didn't bother with the handwritten shit lol.
Yes, I wonder why. Why would you ignore dialogue? Hmmm, what a mystery. Dialogue is dialogue and should be translated. Omitting moans is fine because it's basically SFX, but dialogue is another story.

Page 1 (equal)
Your TL: Who's that?
JP text: なんだなんだ！？
Author intent: "What's going on!?" or "What the heck!?" Both the TLs are wrong here.

Page 2 (better, but still an omission)
Your TL: As expected from Otoguro, the school's no.1 sadist.
JP text: 乙黒怖え～・・・さすが学園一のサディスト言われるだけある
Author intent: "Otoguro is terrifying... Just as you'd expect from the [one referred to as/known as the] school's worst sadist (or number 1 sadist, either works)." You omitted 1/3rd of the sentence, but the rest is indeed more accurate.

Page 2 (worse)
Your TL: Sorry, Yadome. There's nothing we can do to help you.
JP text: 宿女すまん・・・俺達にできるのは見て見ぬフリだけだ・・・！
Author intent: "Sorry, Yadome... All we can do is to turn a blind eye [to this]..." Yes, the IMPLICATION is that they can't help her, but that's not what they say, or how they bring it up.

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Translation aside, Otoguro is really a hero.

1) She saved the boy from getting played by their sexual predator teacher.
2) She let him smash.

Eventually we find out that she blackmailed the teacher and made her into her bitch. The ending is confusing, though; they have a threesome in the end, but the teacher isn't aware that she also fucked the boy. Be nice if we got a continuation that cleared things up. Or just more of Otoguro getting fucked.

Also would be nice if we got an HQ physical scan of the tank at some point.

Chapter 2: /g/1508147/2bd47d096d/
Chapter 3: /g/1599737/566a38fb3b/
Bonus pages showing how Otoguro blackmailed the teacher: /s/dac04ac422/1350013-192

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@cutegyaru: Can you go through the whole thing and check your PMs lol

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I like this story better than his other ones as they're all fugly dude's blackmailing the women. Here the woman is super aggressive and the boy while a wimp can fuck.

Ntr becomes boring because it's the same shit in different boxes, so it's great to have variety.

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when she makes him wear her panties ngh this did not age i need more soft boyos forced into wearing their mean bully kinda-gf panties

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Fuck it I'll remove the meme, improve the translation, typesetting, editing, cleaning and translate the other two chapters along with the bonus pages; the other dude's translation of the other chapters seems to be mostly fine, but there are a few glaring errors, so why don't I fix those. It might be later than sooner, though.

Last edited on 08 March 2022, 22:02.

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Yup, she still makes me think of Juri Han.

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That's why I added the meme.

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If you want to do the meme edits just include them as bonus pages at the end.

I haven't seen much of it on EH but back when I read a lot of non-hentai manga it seemed to be a tradition for scanlation groups to fuck around a bit with rewrites/redraws included as bonus pages or to spice up their credit page, people generally didn't really mind the edits/jokes as long as they were kept separate from the real/serious translation.

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