The art, fetishes, and especially the facial expressions are pretty good, but the plot is borderline incoherent. It's just a collection of barely connected scenes, which would be fine if the author wasn't trying to tell a comic story.
The shoehorned obligatory mention that everyone is "18+ years old" was lame.
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Would you prefer that he leave out the "everyone is 18+ years old" and see a character like Marnie in this? You know... A character who is OBVIOUSLY NOT 18+? Because then that would be even weirder.