@TheGoodGiggle Text looks fine to me both on the versions in the browser and the full size images, but I can re-do the text if others agree with you. The dialogue is heavily inspired by several ChimeraBondage shoots with Maisie - I was attempting to convey an accent and personality very similar to hers. That said, I'm all for constructive criticism of my work, however yours is not - if you can't say it constructively then I'll thank you to keep it to yourself.
I think if some people are color blind then the text might be a challenge to read so a white outline with 1-3pixels? might be great. Pretty good work though.