i don't believe these women have ever been to medical school

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>first customer
>hole is wet
Does not compute.

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好耶！！

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Overall: add a white stroke to floating text cuz it's fucking unreadable. Also, it's very obvious you're plugging a decent amount of your lines in DeepL. You're literally copypasting output at times lol

Page 1
Your TL: What can I do for you, sir?
JP text: 今日のご用件は献精でしょうか？
Author intent: Made up. "Are you here today to donate your sperm?"

Page 1
Your TL: Everything starting from "You've got a strong body, sir." to "Fuu..."
JP text: Irrelevant here, but the text is in "thought" form, actually indicating the two women are speaking to each other or thinking.
Author intent: They're not talking to him. They're either speaking/whispering to one another or it's literally just their thoughts. Notice the much more casual tone.

Page 2
Your TL: Yes it is, you`re the first customer.
JP text: そうですね。お客様ははじめてですね
Author intent: "That's right. This is your first time, isn't it?"

Page 3
Your TL: Your sisters
JP text: お姉さん
Author intent: Onee-san, in this context, doesn't actually mean "sister". It's a very common trope in JP where older women will refer to themselves (or boys referring to older girls) as "onee-chan/san" endearingly. You're best to keep it untranslated.

Page 7
Your TL: A customer in such good spirits.
JP text: こんなに元気なお客さん。。。
Author intent: Genki can mean a fuckton of things depending on context. "Good spirits" refers to one's spirits i.e how they feel. Here, in context, 元気 actually refers to how lively/horny he/his dick is, not if he's having a good day or not.

Page 9
Your TL: it makes it faster and easier
JP text: 速くしてもっと楽にして
Author intent: Edit: actually, I checked the previous lines Alt: If you're linking it to the previous line, you might want to spell it out (how being big makes the whole process faster/easier.)

Last edited on 01 June 2022, 18:13.

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It sperm donation clinics worked like this (attractive girls only) I'd donate for free.

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A few typos:

"squeez" -> "squeeze"
"teatment" -> "treatment"
"still virgin" -> "still a virgin"

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