This is one of my first translation piece. I know it's not the best, but I wanted this to be translated to English so bad, so I did it myself. Let me know what you think.

Here's the link to the original work. Go support this guy, his work is awesome.

https://www.dlsite.com/maniax/work/=/product_id/RJ272578.html

A futanari girl gets caught masturbating by her older sister,
and in her shame and confusion, ends up sexually assaulting her.
From the day on, the two of them enjoy an intense sex life.

just gonna copy and paste my advice below.

List of things you need to learn to be better, I am no editor but just giving you some general advice

1. Use suitable font, wild words is usually acceptable.
2. Make sure to have someone to proofread your/someone translation , by hiring or some other way.
3. Make sure to use proper size and word alignment when placing the text in the dialogue bubble.
4. You can ask for someone advice in the forum on Cove of Scanlator.
5. If able, for courtesy sake, link the raw and official store page, for people who want to genuinely support the artist.

follow these and you re golden.

P.S

I think its better that you search for someone who are willing to clean difficult text for a price.

If only Mods or whoever in charge of the tags creation allow us to create 'futanari on female' tag.

it would have save us a lot of hassle instead of blacklisting a lot of tags.

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Highly recommend you look up how to do basic redrawing and typesetting first, because this looks just atrocious.
Looking at it again, it also seems you used downscaled raws instead of the original image.

Last edited on 05 June 2022, 21:48.

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I think you missed some dialog on p28.

This isn't the best, but it could be worse: at least the english is readable.
You need to get a proofreader anyway.

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i normally dont care about how typesetting looks but that font color/opacity makes it extremely hard to read.

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1) save things as PNG. Never JPEG.
2) don't use MS Paint.
3) don't use MS Paint.
4) don't use MS Paint.
5) for the love of god, don't use MS Paint.
6) use the original resolution images instead of shrunk versions. The first page of the content should be 1200x900. Not 828x622. This isn't 2004.

Lots of rookie mistakes here. Half the problem is that you chose bad font colors and then saved as JPEG, which loses chromatic resolution. This feels like a late 90's throwback on account of some of these typesetting choices.

Even if you don't want to redraw anything, just use opaque boxes at least.

My advice is centered around one-person efforts, and assuming you don't want to either learn redrawing or pay someone else to.
TBH I'd rather have a plain text file with all the dialogue lines in it and match them to the text areas myself than try to read this.

I have work in six hours, so I can't spend time on it now, but in five minutes I did something in GIMP with a laptop touchpad that still (IMO) looks better, just to demonstrate my point. I did a terrible quality redraw, but it still makes a better, more legible result than this.
https://i.imgur.com/FgXnROh.png

This kind of translation is the worst, since the odds are high no one will ever bother to fix it now. Maybe I will if I remember, but don't count on it.

Last edited on 06 June 2022, 03:30.

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Just want to thank everyone for the advice. It really helps me out. I hope to do better with my next project.

Edit: Okay. I'm gonna improve this one first before moving on to other projects. Might be a while though, I want this be the best it can be.

Last edited on 07 June 2022, 12:27.

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No, no. Go back and do better with THIS project first, before you move on to something else.

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It's a great work, futa incest is rare so thanks for the translation. I hope you can at least correct the typesetting color. Personnally I would use two different font color for the sisters instead of background color. And please use not too flashy colors.

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here's a link to the newer version of this manga.

/g/2312935/22fac7c94d/

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