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[fluid liquid (Nukui Ajishio)] Mari to Poolside de Amaetari Amayakashitari (Blue Archive) [English] [Angel Translations] [Digital]

[ふるいどりきっど (ぬくい味汐)] マリーとプールサイドで甘えたり甘やかしたり (ブルーアーカイブ) [英訳] [DL版]

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Posted:2022-08-19 06:37
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Language:English  TR
File Size:63.14 MiB
Length:21 pages
Favorited:310 times
Rating:
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Average: 2.23
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Posted on 19 August 2022, 06:37 by:   lugiarules    PM
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Thank you for checking this out and come join my server if you have any requests :)

https://discord.gg/mmCkyjZ6KG

Thank you so much and have a great day!

Also please feel free to critique me here in the comments, i do check them and take them to heart and hopefully get better from it, i am just one person doing amateurish work so people can enjoy their favorite works that never get translated... so feel free to drop by here or in my server and let me know what i can improve on!
Posted on 19 August 2022, 07:11 by:   Waitugreat    PM
Score +92
Thank you for the english translation! If you allow I'll point out some errors.

p8: some japanese + heart in the bubble
p11: "SENSE'S"

p16: "SENSE'S" and "SENEI" in two different panels instead of Sensei's/Sensei
p16: "we shouldn't go any more than this" -> "we shouldn't go any further than this"

Probably some more (but minor ones) but since I'm not a native english speaker I am not the one who should point out errors/mistakes.

(nice, some errors even fixed while I wrote this comment)
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About your credits page: Disowning a gallery doesn't delete the gallery. It's just that the name of the uploader will be gone. The gallery stays.
So, don't do that. Also people can see what japanese works you translated (what might be good), since they can see if you improved and listened to other people tips. And of course your overall translations.

And it's probably a good idea to remove the nh-site part since this is word filtered here. Or at least just use NH instead of the full name.
Posted on 19 August 2022, 07:16 by:   kirbylittle    PM
Score +43
Just some quick comments from me:

1) Please attempt to redraw instead of just slapping a white box over the old text. Redrawing is an important part of the scanlating process. Increasing the stroke to cover more of the original text is a technique used to reduce the amount of cleaning. If you seriously can't, then at least make a fake text box or something.

2) Try to use more fonts. The artist used handwriting for the moaning and other sfx, which is distinctly different from the normal font, but you used the same font for both.

3) Try googling heart text symbols instead of using <3. It's quick to do and looks a lot better. ♡
Posted on 19 August 2022, 07:36 by:   cutegyaru    PM
Score +263
We're really gonna be stuck with you spamming your half-assed shit just because you want to scam some poor souls out of their money, aren't we?
Posted on 19 August 2022, 13:24 by:   molitar    PM
Score -100
Ruined by fucking over censored zebra dick.. why the FUCK do people even bother translating this shit! Find some real doujin that are not fucking over censored!

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