hey guys this is my first tf story i want to share with you to know what do you think.

Decent model, good posing and expressions, lack of story. Being a little clearer what was going on, who her corrupter was, or just having an identity would make it a lot better - Or cut it down a bit so it's more focused.

Base +10, techcloud +6, Xhion Pime +7, cozzy121 +6

Same opinion here looks good for a first time so can expect slight improvements that come with expirience but is still better then 80% i know of already.
Only thing missing lack of story or explanation dunno if with text or with actions to see what happens would be up to the creator to find his style and pherhaps give it a room to masturbate on not some empty black backround but on the other side that makes object interaction a thing and the whole process a lot harder so i guess i give this 4/5 well done

Base +14