Quote:" ... I think this turned out alright."

I'm not qualified to judge your translation, so I just focus on the typesetting. To me it seems like you've never seen a well typeseted manga in your entire life if you really think this is alright. Despite the questionable font you made one of the biggest mistakes you can make while typeseting a manga. Using left aligned text instead of center aligned text.

If you want to improve your typesetting here are some helpful links:
https://www.insidescanlation.com/etc/the-idiots-guide-to-editing-manga/guide/main
https://www.ruinevil.com/rawr/editguide/index.html
https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/
https://mangadex.org/title/08e1f85a-bb12-4fe4-aec5-0d7a80b3a261/anonblack-s-typesetting-guide?tab=chapters

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Thank you for your release, much appreciated!

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