Honestly your editing needs a lot of work, especially if you're gonna ask to be paid for this. I checked your other releases and it seemed a lot better then, so idk what happened here.
1. Your font is really ugly. Or maybe it's because you keep adding that weird black drop shadow? 2. You don't redraw. There's mismatched white, grey, or whatever-colored boxes everywhere slapped on top of floating text. I know redrawing is annoying, but man, c'mon. 3. You keep leaving JP punctuation (like vertical ellipses) or not punctuating at all. Not only is this jarring, it's also ugly. 4. You have a lot of left-over dust in your bubbles.
Guides to help you:
General resources: https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/ Typesetting: https://web.archive.org/web/20190406011154/https://fallensyndicate.wordpress.com/typesetting-tutorial/ Redrawing: https://web.archive.org/web/20150421210157/http://www.redhawkscans.com/showthread.php?7057-Rain-s-Redraw-Tutorials Basic cleaning: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PANrCwHy630
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